IN THE NOW... Present Tense Writing!

Kia Ora Bloggers!

In today's post, I will be sharing what we have been doing for writing this week.

This term our focus for writing is description. That means that we are working on writing in the present tense. I find this pretty easy to do as I have done it in the past.

If you didn't already know, for each focus, we have a workbook we work through and do activities/write on.

This week and last week, we have been preparing for our E-asttle test that is coming up very quickly, which is scary but we have also been doing things to help us with that.

Something we did was we looked at the rubric that our teachers mark us on and we marked other people's marking.

Today we marked our own pieces of writing with our editing buddy. It was actually kind of fun to do. We marked them on:

Ideas

Structure & Language

Organisation

Sentence Structure

Vocabulary.

Here is my piece of writing and how it got marked:

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The Forest of flowers.

Staring into the horizon, I can see the colours of the morning sun shining upon my face, creating shadows behind me. I can feel a peaceful morning surrounding me.  Breathing in & out, I can see the clouds of my breath, indicating that it is a cold morning. I continue to take steps, in the forest of trees and flowers.

Closing me eyes, I can feel the shallow breath of wind upon my face. Taking a step into the rows of flowers beneath me, I can feel the crunch of the flowers; as I turn around after I step, I see a trail of flowers springing back up after being crunched. Taking more steps, I glance down to my feet, my shoes are turning purple from the flowers. Staring into blank space, there are dozens of green leaved trees staring back at me.

I begin to dance around, I feel like a lamb on a cloud, prancing around, all light and fluffy. I can feel the flowers brushing my ankle, tickling me. Taking in a huge breathe, I can feel tension releasing. I can feel a clarity in the midths of a morning walk. I am a floating hot air balloon, flying free through the air, not caring about anything else but what is happening to me right now.

Creeping up on me, I can feel a massive gust of wind whooshing up onto me, clambering all over me, making sure I cannot go anywhere but down. A feeling of adrenaline attacks my body, flowing throughout my blood system like a hungry monster. I can hear the leaves swaying back and forth. An orchestra is formed by the leaves and flowers.

The flow of wind is a slapping hand to my face, trying to get me to listen. The hand doesn't understand me, it doesn’t listen because all it does is create havoc. The flowers are turned into a tornado of peace and harmfulness, the beauty lighting up the whole forest with a golden sprinkle of freshness.

Slowing down, the wind flow comes to a stop. My hair has become ruffled and I fix it. Stepping down again, I remember the beauty of this place and why it should be protected. Glaring into the sky, I see the sky has changed into day time.

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My marks:

Ideas = R5

Structure and Language = R6

Organisation = R6

Sentence Structure = R5

Vocabulary = R5

Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoyed it.

I really enjoyed doing all of these activities and I hope you like my writing.

Thank You for reading this post.

See you next time.

Nga Mihi,

Julia